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I loved how you wrote this in a very casual was brilliant. But I felt that it was more and more southern as you read on. Try to keep the ...

Wow. Your writing style is fantastic . Some of the best I've seen on here. I couldn't find anything stylistically or specific phrases that I didn't like, so here are ...

I'm not really sure of when it's okay to write numbers instead of words, but when you're in doubt, always pick words. I thought the rule was if the number ...

Okay, I thought for a long while that they were sitting in a cafe and talking. I know you said they met above the Milky Way, but that didn't make ...

Stupid main character! Give him a chance! Goodness... Ahem. This was very good. I bet knowing the past of the MC would have let us know why she hated this ...

You need to look for your typos...I won't bother to go through and tell them to you. This is very well-written. I loved how you went from the short, concise ...

I don't have much time right now, so I'm not gonna give this an actual critique. I would just like to say I loved this. Loved it. The whole sparrows ...

This is a really short memoir. It only has one anecdote, and I don't know...obviously this girl is important to you, but I just am not getting why she is ...

This was beautiful. Nearly everything about it I loved. God, my eyes are a bit wet from reading this. One thing I didn't like was when you called her "little ...

Feel free to disregard anything I say. All are suggestions and you are the writer... Okay. Specific line nitpicks first... Callie Whittum sat down at the cracked, ancient oak table ...

Wow. This is really, really cool. It isn't fiction to me, but it's a wonderful...whatever it is. I think it could work nicely as a poem as well. So there's ...

Okay, this was amazing how closely connected this was to To Kill a Mockingbird, one of my favorite books. I loved how you sort of "modeled" it after that book ...

Feel free to disregard anything I say. You have the final voice in the end. This is a very very short bit to critique, so there really isn't that much ...

I honestly have nothing I dislike about this piece. You have a wonderful style and know just the right words to use. I'd love to read whatever is going to ...

I love your first line. Love it. The only "critique-ish" things going through my mind were the same as Snoink--include more background on the exes. I'm interested in what the ...