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Hi RainbowQueen! The story's not bad at all. It got me reading till the very end, so at least you know it's not boring. ;) First things first, it would ...

Hello, Meep! Gosh, we have two Meeps now. Anyway! I have to run really quick so I'll give a brief review, okay? The MC(main character) seems to have a serious ...

Hmm. Hah, I find it interesting that you two wrote this together. Janet screamed in response and nearly jumped off the lounge in fright, "For f**k's sake, Paul!" I suggest ...

Dear Pingu, I loved this greatly so much so that as I read, everything went silent around me and it was just me and the words. =) But anyway... ...and ...

Hahah! I laughed reading this. Wait, hold on, that later. :D The bad stuff comes first: “Ummm...Daddy?” asked the little boy, making a low whistling noise as he blew his ...

Hey Batchick. Just a note for you, it's best to keep the ratios of your reviews to your work 2:1, okay? Also, please don't use caps. It's fine enough to ...

Hey, Matty. :) Wow, odd indeed. I'm more confused than touched. Nonetheless... I stayed with you. After all we’d been though together; after all of our time apart, I held ...

Hey Kristie! Before I start, I thought I'd just let you know that it's advisable to make at least 2 reviews first before posting your first work, okay? Now, on ...

Hmm...I won't go to any grammar details or anything of the like since you might be rewriting this. I haven't read your novel, but I understand what you mean by ...

Hey, Fan! Soo sorry I took so long. But here's my promised crit! :) Lightning tore across the star studded sky and the rain battered Kyvor relentlessly as he struggled ...

The smell of the blood covering his back and pooling on the cell floor around him was making him nauseous. The pain had numbed the nerves in his back, etc. ...

Hey selena, nice to have you on YWS. :) Something I have to tell you: you should review before you post your work. I see you have 7 posts and ...

Ah, lovely. That's the word! Lovely. :D A young brown - haired boy was deep in an embrace with the girl he loved. Although two years distanced Kel from the ...

A welcome breeze blew across in from the sea, sporadically turning into a sudden gust of wind that made the hem of her dress flap wildly. "Welcoming breeze", perhaps? And ...

My life is messed up , I thought to myself. It should be in italics, and a coma at the end of the thought. The sun was shining in my ...