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FutureAstronaut

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Last Job - Short Story

    Great story! The plot makes sense and the characters are down-to-earth. I didn't see very many mistakes if any. Some sentances are confusing, like: The sun is still pouring over ...

    Oct 8, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Triple Homicide

    I really enjoyed the story, though the part where the main character went cannibal was kind of creepy. There was a lot of errors in the story, like capitalization was ...

    Aug 25, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Out With Magic

    This story is very well written, with little to no mistakes that i saw. The plot line plays out very well and the descriptions are spectacular. The way the setting ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Caylee

    I think your poem is heart warming. I didn't see any mistakes which shows how much time you put in this poem (along with the poem itself of course). I ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Your My True Love

    I thought the story was cute and had a plot line, BUT: 1: Capitalization. It was overlooked in a lot of places, such as at the beginning of sentences. You ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: My nightmare of a life

    This story was exactly what a scary book should be, scary. I was confused on what happened when he smashed his nose. I think that he fell through a window ...

    Jul 19, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: No Witnesses

    This story is very well written, although some punctuation errors can be found. When ending a quote that doesn't end in an exclamation point or question mark, a comma needs ...

    Jul 19, 2011


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