Formslipper

I read it. Good work, Renn. Can I tell you something? Your writing style is virtually the same as mine was a year ago. That's not to say your overall ...

I read it. Anna seems to be the opposite of Shawn, which is good- everything needs an antithesis. I never nit pick, so nothing to say there. All's great, so ...

I read it. Good job, and -hmmm- Shawn is very cynical, moody, and crass. It makes me wonder, "Will this person's incessant cussing and bleak outlook on life be explained ...

I read some of it, kjr5horses. In one of your replies to this, you mentioned having written 55 pages in 4 weeks- WOW! How the heck did you do that?! ...

I read it. This work is good, but you should go over it with precision to fix a lot of its sentence structure. You had several fragments like this: Watched ...

Can I admit that I found this disturbing? I mean- a girl who "goes into fits" that make her cut herself, and who sees numbers over peoples' heads that tell ...

I can't believe I'm saying this to someone my own age, but... that was amazing! I'm terribly jealous of your incredible gift. From the moment it began, everything- the characters, ...

I read the first half of this. To be honest, it's so forthcoming (elegant descriptions, bold characters, stately settings, etc.) However, your robust descriptions and plot-lines contrast directly with

What a great story! I thought it flowed well, so no comments there. It was also entertaining. My definition of entertainment is, "The length of time till I'm bored." And ...

Hey writer, This is a good work, and I enjoyed it. However, you seem to have a problem with making items, places, and people truly significant to the protagonist. For ...

I read your first chapter and thought it was unique, but I think your plot could use something a bit deeper that makes me really care about your characters more. ...