Flemzo

Sad, sad story. It's a shame that such love can seemingly go to waste. I loved this piece, if only because I'm a sucker for pieces with music incorporated into ...

Excellent, excellent! Nothing like social commenary on mindless drones. I loved the imagry you had here. I noticed a few puncuation things, minor really, but there's one that's glaring. ...the ...

Your title pulled me in, which is really good, because I don't crit a lot of things based on their titles. One quick fix on it, though: "Anyways" isn't a ...

This was pretty good. Very good imagry here, and I like the effect with the no caps and "plop" having it's own line, giving it a finite ending. However, you ...

First, let me just say, while this was well written, it's been written before. Many, many times before. The poem is just so short that you have tons of room ...

Great job! I can't really find anything that stuck out, except your first and last stanzas. They are exactly the same, so why not make them look the same? Sure ...

Cute, but not quite a sonnet because there's no iambic pentameter. But I commend you on trying to rhyme throughout. Like I said, it's a cute poem, and kind of ...

Hey God (hah), I'm going to through this paragraph by paragraph, offering suggestions where I see fit, okay? Let's begin: "You have been charged with teaching blasphemy and heresy among ...

I liked this poem. I'm not sure why, but there's something about it that attracts me to it. So, great job on that. Ride along little bobin , What is ...

Hey Tag, I really liked this poem, not because of the subject matter (which was depressing and seemingly very personal), but because of the unique way you came about it. ...

Normally, I'd do a line-by-line thing here, but there are just so many grammatical errors that it would probably take me twenty minutes to point them all out. All I'll ...

This is a really cute piece! Maybe it's because I have an affinity for penguins, but this was a very enjoyable read. “Puffin,” he said, studying them carefully. “Privately Uncontrollable ...

All I have to say about this poem is that it's clever. I didn't really like it, but I admire the cleverness of it. Just a couple of things I ...

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Excellent job here. I can definitely get a sense of where you're coming from (I'm assuming you're not a fan of the commercialization of religion, either, eh?). Just a couple ...