Fireweed

The content is good, but the rhyming feels rather forced,the middle and last stanzas don't quite rhyme. I would just make this a free-verse poem. Rhyme can be constricting sometimes. ...

Yay, Emily Dickinson! I like this alot; it flows smoothly and the imagery is lovely. I particularly liked the first and last stanzas. Those are the kind of phrases you ...

I don't really have anything constructive to say, the other comment-ers already covered any changes that needed to be made. I just wanted to say that I really, really like ...

This is very interesting. It left me wanting more. Some typos: "Blood continued to bubble from the [b]gapping[/b] hole in his stomach and Sarah looked at it in alarm." I ...

Morbid, twisted, and funny. :lol: Yes, the rhyme was pretty forced in several parts, but this poem was meant to be entertaining rather than a serious piece, no?

Awesome. Consistent rhyme and rhythm, smooth flow, lovely imagery, lyrical phrases. This has an ancient, mystical feel to it, like something you would read in a fantasy book. Sorry if ...

This is very intriguing; only a paragraph, but it's already gripped me.I'd really like to see where it goes. It seems very sci-fi-ish, but it's hard to tell from just ...

Surprisingly deep for a poem inspired by a t.v. show... :) I like this alot. It's short yet very effective, it flows well and the rhyme is brilliant. You could ...

I haven't read the LOTR, though I plan to read at least the 1st one someday... I'm probably not mature enough yet. I have a pretty short attention span. :) ...

Ooh. I like this. I don't having anything all that constructive to say, I'm afraid... there's really nothing I think could be improved. This is a really powerful poem, I ...

This is a good description of a horse, though some of the phrases are pretty cliche. This isn't an especially powerful poem, but it's nice, I enjoyed it. One typo: ...

This is a very good beginning... Darker than what I personally like to read and write, but that doesn't make it any less well-written. Just make sure that the violence ...

That sounds interesting; I love books about girls in other times and cultures. But if it's too terribly graphic, I'll wait... I'll try to remember the title till I'm 16. ...

Nice... l really like the format of sonnets, and this also had nice imagery. A typo: I think in the 2nd to last line, you meant to say, " Why ...

Wow. This is depressing, but very well-written, original and interesting. Your descriptions are very vivid. I don't have any negative feedback on this, just praise. Cheers! 8)