"On being a Vulcan", or, "A Lyrical Treatise

by Phoenixfire
  • September 14, 2006
  • Poetry
  • Other

Killing emotion
That human condition
Dragging our consciousness into the dust
While logic and reason
The clearminded decision
Are cast by the wayside to molder and rust

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gyrfalcon
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gyrfalcon commented · Mon Sep 18, 2006 12:39 am

ooooooo, very nice!

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Fireweed
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Fireweed wrote a review · Thu Sep 14, 2006 6:52 am

Surprisingly deep for a poem inspired by a t.v. show... :)

I like this alot. It's short yet very effective, it flows well and the rhyme is brilliant. You could expand on it, but not if it feels complete to you... If you try to expand on a poem simply to make it longer, it usually sound forced...

Kudos on this, welcome to YWS!!



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