Firearris

Thanks very much, all! I'll make the changes ASAP. :) ~Arris

Hi! I'll edit this later to review, since I have to go. But one suggestion, don't do the full caps, because now my eyes hurt. @__@

goes from flights of fancy to being very realistic and full of worry. I have to ask if this was intentional. Actually, yes, it was! When I was writing this, ...

Midnight: But the bold ones in order and see what you get, ;)

I like this poem, as I already told you. XP No mistakes are jumping out at me saying "Fix me! Fix me!" So, Good job! ^_^ Its a big poem, ...

Thanks for all the reviews, everyone! I'll change it when I can, and maybe repost it later! Thanks again, ~Arris

Firearris, Thank you again for critiquing this. It means a lot to me!!! I'll go through and make those corrections. Thank all of you again. :Sythe: Anytime. Let me know ...

Haha. I didn't quite understand any of that, partly because I think it's been using YWS people. I really liked it. It was funny. You could use some detail in ...

Thanks Everyone! :) I'll make the changes ASAP, and maybe re-post it. ^_^ Flemzo: X_X Just try not to click on my first few stories. :razz: Max: I think you ...

Lol. Very funny, and cute. I see no mistakes, just a very, very, Cute poem! Lol, good job, Saint, ~Fire

Okay, one thing, Volant. Jesus is also a Spanish name, pronounced Hay-Suess (Suess, like Dr.suess) I have to go, so I will edit this when I get back and have ...

Yep! I've also read them. ^.^ I'm going to get "Dawn" from the New Prophecy soon. :razz:

Erm....are you saying bye? Or Hello and that you have returned? *Confused* Anyways, either way, post it here:

Hi dove! I think you need to space out paragraph seven a bit more. After you do that, PM me and I will crit it for you. :D Firearris

Try to edit it and make it clear that they are teens. Not 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, year olds. And also "There still was one town with children but ...