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Finchley

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Alone and Solo

    WOW I really like this. As in, ALOT. But I was just wondering what you intended in a few places here and there. ............................................................. "So everyday it's all the

    Mar 23, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Dream on Thunder

    This is really crazy abstract, but the style itself fits with what you're saying. The rhythm is kind of strange, though, so maybe that's something you might want to think ...

    Feb 21, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: When it happens

    I disagree with Cheeky - I thought the ending brought it back around and tied it up in a nice, neat little box. Your words really flow (they don't drag ...

    Feb 21, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Love of My Life

    This is obviously really personal, so I won't say too much. However there are a few raw spots that don't quite seem to match, like "You're so special to me" ...

    Feb 20, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: What the Earth used to be

    It's very depressing, but I like the overall style of it, if that makes any sense. And the last line is the best out of the whole poem. I feel ...

    Feb 20, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Pompeii

    Wow... I don't think I've ever read any of your poetry. Well, I mean serious poetry. Do haikus about socks count? I'm not sure. Anyway, I really love the way ...

    Feb 20, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: "You got the top pulled down baby..."

    I've totally been there too - I love those sort of days, and there's nothing better than driving by all those fields in an open car. Lovely description, but I ...

    Feb 13, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Alive but Dying

    I love the over-all pattern of this poem - it's dark and grim, and I like it. However, some of the rhymes just seem a little shaky, I guess. For ...

    Feb 13, 2008


Don't aim at success--the more you aim at it and make it a target, the more you are going to miss it. For success, like happiness, cannot be pursued; it must ensue, and it only does so as the unintended side-effect of one's dedication to a cause greater than oneself or as the by-product of one's surrender to a person other than oneself.
— Viktor E. Frankl