Feltrix

I'll take that into account!

Thanks for the review! To clarify one of your points, Aisling is not intended to be an entirely reliable narrator, and Duster's actions and motivations are intentionally ambiguous. Aisling is ...

Thanks for the review! I haven't written in a while, so I'm really glad to hear that you liked this. This story is actually about one of my D&D characters, ...

[Clue 12/20] Classified analysis of the above written work: >> The unusual nature of this short story implies that this is unlikely a work of pure fiction. >> The Star ...

I'd love to. Sadly, real world assigned stuff is getting in the way.

In the literary spotlight after only a few hours and no reviews? That must be some sort of achievement.

Thanks for the review! I'm definitely going to try to add more tension when I start on the next chapter as @BlueAfrica suggested much the same thing.

Thanks for the suggestions! They won't show up on YWS until the second draft of the story, but I will take everything you say into account.

You make a lot of valid points. These changes, like most of the ones you suggest, probably won't show up on YWS until the next draft, but just know that ...

Thanks for the review! And yeah, that description of the Harbinger was weird. It was probably rewritten a couple times, which is why it's like that. I don't read these ...

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16+ for language? Huh.

Nope. Geese are superior to ducks in every way.* *No, I'm exaggerating, don't take me literally, it's just that geese are generally better and nothing springs to mind when I ...

I'd say you're mean, but we both know 'evil' or 'demonic' would be better adjectives for you.