Fellow

Hmm... “So what is this shadow you were talking abo-,“ I was cut off by Melody’s hand on my mouth, her face was only a few inches away from mine; ...

Took me a while to get here, actually a month or so, am I right? Sorry :D Well you asked for a review so here it is: First of all ...

Sorry for the delay. Busy with the holidays. Here`s the review you asked for. My personal comments will be with italic , add and examples will be with bold . ...

Ah... the second chapter! Hmm... You made it too empty this time. I'll point out and give you examples. Here it goes: 1. He realized that this ride was going ...

To be honest my lower jaw just dropped in surprise... I haven't read such a good piece for a while. (Meaning at the "real life" form). Amazing descriptions, feelings, character`s ...

Salve, Kaylyn! Long time no see, ay? Your review coming up! *You see a man dragging a body through the an open door behind me. I smile and close the ...

Salve! Well, you asked a review here I am! Before I start cutting and adding I`ll start with the usual stuff which are that this is a nice story, full ...

Ehm... I hope I`m not to late. I was so busy with the exams that I barely got close to the computer. Sorry for the delay. Here`s the review you ...

Hallos Sea! As usual I`ll start with the good things which are that what you wrote is quite good thinking at the story line, characters` acting. You lack the feeling ...

Salve! Let's see your work :smt023 Loads of things that you can add. In this chapter the drawing thing that you made in the first 5 chapters fades and with ...

Hey, mate! Looking for a review aren't you? :) Well here I am still with a broken arm :roll: I walked into a café called elf house. The café had ...

Hey. Long time no see. First nice part of a story ... now the review :) My comments will be normal and my adds and rewrites in bold . All ...

First story? Welcome to the Club, girl! :) Don't worry about it. We all (at least the ones that see it) will help you improve your style and so on. ...

Salve! I was looking for something to read and saw this fragment on the Home page. So at least I can do is review it and tell you that you ...

Hallos! Sorry I forgot about this. I took my time and reviewed it properly. Here it goes : So the main character is a girl. Ok. Being a boy and ...