FantasyWriterGirl15

I checked back through it, and most of the errors I pointed out are still there.

That line is bolded because on a different website, that's the whole first line, not half, and I just forgot to remove it. At least for this beginning part, is ...

Thanks for your review!

I mena, Elsa didn't actually KILL her sister Ana with her powers. But she hit her in the heart, and NEARLY killed her. They were also princesses.

Thanks for your review! :D

Thanks for your advice, but I, as the author, feel that most of that information about Peyton is needed. You can't learn who she is if you don't know anything ...

But they think they're bad-asses anyways.

Thanks so much! I think this is one of my favorite stories that I've written.

And I meant to add in there that I did the best I could with the fact that I haven't read the rest of the chapters.

Actually, everything I've written in here is essential to the plot, even if people don't realize it yet. That man is REALLY important, and him attacking her is something that ...

Thanks so much! I'm usually pretty good at finding grammar errors before I post things, so yay that you didn't find any! And I'm really glad you liked it!

Those nitpicky things are really helpful, thanks! I know that it probably still needs some work, since it's still a first draft. I'm glad that overall you liked it! And ...

Thanks so much! This is still a first draft, so the grammatical errors are to be expected. :D

No problem, glad I could help!

I didn't mean to be harsh, I'm a bit OCD when it comes to grammar and such, which is why I used to do a bit of editing. So I ...