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First of all, I have to commend you for using the word "juxtaposition" in a poem and succeeding in making it not sound clunky. Never thought I'd see that happen. ...

I tried, I really tried... but the line breaks are so far off in this poem that they grate on the inner ear. I do like some of the imagery ...

Hey Goose! And I'll have to second what these two've said: fantastic job! You've got a definite style, and you work it well; every word has its place. It's very ...

Oh no... I read this in the seventh grade... three times. In one year. Yeah. My English teacher was not only an airhead, she was also a stubborn, sadistic airhead ...

Well, that was an easy one. J. R. R. Tolkien is the reason why I've wanted to be a writer from a young age. I actually like the Silmarillion better ...

This is really and truly a fantastic piece - though I have a few suggestions as far as flow/pacing goes, the content itself is superb, and your word choice is, ...

*whistles* All right; I give up. No more writing poetry when I could be reading stuff like this. I agree with everything Sam says - especially the part about 'stoking ...

Gorgeous - the imagery was so vibrant it really fulfilled the promise made by your title. It was like reading a painting, if that makes any sense at all. I ...

Hey there, Imp! This is really a fantastic little piece - I've never been any good at character sketches, and that someone could pull off one as great as this ...

Apple grinds are not filtered out, and cling to the insides of you capillary walls, speaking selfless confidence in your ears during the most wastelandish nights. [Bit of Eliot influence, ...

I'll have to disagree with xanthan on one point: I rather like your opening lines. They are forceful or passionate or intricate, but in a very subtle way, they're incredibly ...

I second MH on the "rain" thing, but really, this was quite good. I prefer the brother's part for some reason I couldn't even quite explain; it just feels more ...

First of all, I have to applaud you for even attempting a pantoum - I took one look at the format when I was studying poetry and knew I'd never ...

Myth: you should definitely read the full Jane Eyre if you get the chance - most of the magic was in the telling of the story, rather than the story ...