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I'm now pretending I don't know starbucks cups are not made with Styrofoam. Thanks for your comments Dream and Lemon. My sense is the poem is pretty good as is, ...

Thanks Jasmine, glad that you liked it. I agree on the one line, and changing it let me fit in a line I hadn't space for before.

Thanks Chips

Gold or fold might work, they both can be used several ways. Look at the children pale with cold hands frozen, hearts weary as others pave streets with gold spirits ...

Thank you ^^

That was the quickest reply ever.

Its interesting, the line everyone likes the most is the one I was most concerned about. A Burning Cigarette / I have judged The train grinds to a halt at ...

Ok. So, thanks for the two responses so far. Quote: Immediately I am attentive, for this is an offense to me. Quote: I glance at the woman, who quite handily ...

Ok, here is the present version of the poem, with some notes on your comments. The Day All the Roses Died One day all the roses died. Not all at ...

You seem to use fullstops nearly all of the time you should try useing commas or semi - colons, this would give a better effect to you're writing I think ...

Hi everyone, There are many, many comments to analyze here, and tomorrow or Monday I am going to try to do some editing. Thank you for all the responses again, ...

Hmm, I won't address the rest of the comments you made immediately because its late, I just wanted to address the last one. When I wrote this poem, I felt ...

Thanks for the feedback and the welcome. :) Just some comments and changes on the poem. One day all the roses died, Not all at once, just a few at ...