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Cool. I like it. I'm not exactly sure what it means, but then, its poetry. :) Just a note, keep the number of people the same. At the very end ...

Hi Megan, I appreciate the sentiment of the poem, but I would suggest some changes. The main thing I note is that the poem is divided into six line stanzas, ...

This is good. :) I'm not going to give grammatical feedback, since that has already been supplied. I was just wondering, from my view of children in bad situations, despite ...

Interesting. I've never read a poem based on a video game before. I'd just note, there is some awkward wording in the poem. For example Ever so gracefully she lands ...

I admit that I'm not exactly sure what this poem is describing, though it is intriguing. I just want to check, is git the right word in the fourth line? ...

A short poem. First just a minor typo, I'm pretty sure you meant to write taught instead of thought. The impression I get from this poem is that someone has ...

Hmm. This is a sad poem :( The girl appears happy on the outside but really shes struggling within herself contemplating suicide? The people are her and her inner mind? ...

Hi Yoha (Ellen?), I know exactly what your talking about in this poem, I think some of the same thoughts every time I'm on the bus with forty so strangers. ...