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Re: The River
This is a very beautiful and... reflective poem! "the remains of a hard life's work continuing." I think that you could take out the, "continuing," part since you are comparing ...
Jun 14, 2021 -
Re: John Klues Collection of Poignant Parables.
"But you need not worry our skilled and specially trained Managementalists are on the case," Some form of punctuation is needed ("you need not worry, our skilled and..." or, "you ...
Jun 13, 2021 -
Re: Broken pieces
Hello! I found your poem very interesting! I think putting the two line stanza at the end of your poem could be a way to resolve the poem since it ...
Jun 13, 2021 -
Re: The Basement Tapes
Great start! I just have a couple of suggestions. "it was Jackson Stilt, the butler, staring an evil grin at me." Maybe change it to "staring at me with an ...
Jun 13, 2021 -
Re: Ask me who I am and this is what I'll tell you
"I loved it, really, but the name began to annoy me." Just a grammatical thing but I think you should put a comma before and after the "really." "I would ...
Jun 13, 2021
