Fabien

Thanks Cloud_Stepping, you couldn't of understood the message & feeling any better which I was trying to express through this poem.

Thanks for all your thoughts. This poem was written in October 2002 when I was fourteen... so that's why it may seem childish, and I agree that it's rather childish. ...

I grew up right on the sea. The waves and the spray in the winter would splash the front windows of our house.. Words can't describe how that piece made ...

This piece is contradicting to me. Complicated and factual, yet it was simple and philosophical. Out of the blue, but I enjoyed it.

Thank you Chevy for your kind words. It's nice to hear you didn't think it was overbearing, I was worried about that. Glad I got the meaning across. Riedawriter23, I ...

Riedawriter23:--> Thank you for the praise. As I go back and re read my piece, those two lines you mentioned do seem to hiccup and I need to change them. ...

"It's an unusual piece, I don't normally see poems with lines so long." Well, I've always written lines like this, and thought them to be normal, this is probably because ...

POP as in popular?

In reply to Mad's thoughts: "Tell me you don't think so?" I thought of this line for a bit after your suggestions, and a comma would make it correct in ...

Despite what others have said, I liked it. I liked the fact that it has a quick, abrupt sense to it. I liked that it started all nice, then took ...