Explosive_Pen

Hi there. I agree with Galerius; there is too much importance placed on the rhyme scheme than on the actual coherence of the poem. The rhyme breaks the flow and ...

Hi Clo! I first read this a while ago, actually, but didn't feel as if I could give you a good review on it. But I noticed it in the ...

Hi Snoink! I read it all the way through, and I loved it. I'm not a big sci-fi fan, but I do find myself wanting to read more. I like ...

Twin! So my review on this will probably suck, but I know you asked me a while ago... And since you reviewed mah poem and all I guess I'm indebted. ...

Kamasss.

Hi Kamas. ^^ It's been a while since I've brought myself to review something, so excuse me if I'm not much help. This was a pretty great poem, Kammy-chan. Just ...

Hi Sureal! This was a good read. A little, erm, vivid , but entertaining. Captain Classy and June already pointed out the things that I was going to. I thought ...

Hi there! Here as requested. that ...other I don't quite like the repetition of "each other," especially since in the next line you say "one another." Find another way to ...

Hi there Kylan! I don't think I've ever reviewed something of yours before (totally wasn't intimidated or anything silly like that...). I think you should capitalize your sentences. That's a ...

Hi there! Sorry this took so long. I haven't reviewed prose in a long time, and I haven't read the first part, but I'll do my best with what I ...

Kammy-chan! *tacklepouncenoms* How dare you. You have talent. *paints the word 'talent' onto Kammy's face in big letters* Oh, and by the way, I didn't get a chance to congradulate ...

xD Smorgishborg, you are brilliant. From being a fellow Vampire Weekend fan, to being the first to review my poem, to this? Fantastic-schmastic. I have very few negative comments about ...

First of all, please use proper grammar. Everyone who passed second grade is required to punctuate properly. It's common courtesy, especially when posting it on a site filled with people ...

Hi there! I haven't seen you around before, so welcome to YWS. First of all, don't use unnecessary ellipses. (I think that's what they're called? If not, it's these: ... ...

Hi Rosey! I agree with Evi about the beginning. It seems to be a little forced and tell-y. It had started innocently enough. The abruptness of this sentence suggests foreshadowing. ...