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Hm... The thing is that he's only captain because the humans put him there because he's similar to them (from his first conversation with Ochon). Like, he's not necessarily good ...

Is that dislike of Chip a good kind though? Like, it's what I'm going for at this point, but is it a satisfying tension, or just frustrating?

Awesome, will fix the nit-picks :) (and will try and fix the consistency stuff on a more macro level)

Hm... ok. Will see what I can do about all this. I did an entire rewrite of chapter 1. Might be worth doing this for 2 and maybe 3 as ...

Hm... it makes sense for this to feel episodic since that was originally the format xD What I'm trying to do instead is make the jeopardy Chip still being a ...

Thanks! I think that's probably a fair review, I did write it rather quickly :) I like the idea of this being a novel. Just worried about how often I'd ...

Cool, thanks :)

Oh, also, would it make any difference to know that in my head it's an interview with Dom? If so do you think I should explicitly frame it that way?

Ahh, it's actually two guys, which was my concept for the story. I was hoping "Dom" would be a masculine enough name that it would be obvious. I was walking ...

Woah, seriously congrats on getting to the end of a novel! :D

np :)

you too :)

no worries :)

Oh actually I can do that coins just now :)

Oh btw, alright to wait for Review Day for me to start on your The Progeny reviews?