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Hello Woozey! This is very well-written, and has the potential to be a really moving and powerful piece. I felt a lot of that already-- but there's even more you ...

Me again! Hope you don't mind. ;) Firstly, I don't necessarily suggest you switch Points of View for each chapter. That tends to get confusing for the reading, and just ...

Hello Jokeless Jester! Firstly, listen to everything Wooster said, because it is absolutely right. ;) I'll mention some different things. Wait, before I get ahead of myself, you do at ...

Happy National Poetry Day! I'm here in order to celebrate the occasion; bring on the confetti! The rumbling clouds are crashing down like waves. And I ' m walking on ...

Hey Nike! I'm Evi, and I'm going to be completely honest in the hope that you take none of my constructive criticism the wrong way. This needs work. The biggest ...

Sorry for the delay! savouring the bitter taste of it. He truly hated the taste of olives, but so did his wife and it repulsed her when he ate some. ...

Hello Kit! I hurt. I hurt all over. Laaame. ;) This is the textbook definition of telling, and not showing. And the last thing you want to do is use ...

Yo-la, Hannah, dear. It's wonderful to see you posting something again. ;) So, heavily-stylized prose like this has never been my reviewing strong point, because I'm always worried that (a) ...

Hello Aura! Welcome to YWS. Just as a reminder, the more reviews you do on other people's works, the more likely you are to be reviewed. ;) The smell of ...

Hello Luna! I'm Evi. Welcome to YWS. So, this is a step in the right direction! You have a good basis for conflict (the confrontation) and an interesting scenario. However, ...

Hello, Jiggity! This is solidly written as a whole, so I'm going to focus a bit on the technicalities of the piece. it is quiet here. This seems to contradict ...

Here as requested! Sorry it took so long, dear. Feel free to bug me about it next time I forget. Surprisingly, it hasn't yellowed much at all since it was ...

Hello TTT! I'm going to do a blanket review on all three parts so far, since they're essentially the same story. Warning: I'm going to be honest. ;) You said ...

Hey, Bear. I enjoyed this very much. Normally I'd harp on about not much happening, and how a first chapter needs more of a hook, but I think the subtle ...

Hey, Kaedee. Not much to work with here, eh? It's written well, though. Well, first of all, I'd like to suggest that you avoid Prologues like the plague. This works ...