Esmé

Also, how could they 'happen to notice the house' so suddenly if it's been in their neighborhood for ages, being so old?

Corrected - thanks for telling me.

I think that this is supposed to be in the fiction section, not in writing activities!

Better? hangs head* - I liked the names, lol.

I think it had a flow, but I can't say that I liked it. Why did you capitalize every single word? I also couldn't get any meaning out of that.

I agree with everyone who posted before me. I think that you should actually reread what you wrote before posting it... -The idea was okay, I guess...

Okay, I see that everything has been said, lol. I just wanted to add that the description of the dragon was fabulous.

Thank you Lilly and Phorcys for taking your time and writing a critique! As to the first paragraph, I know it is a bit... well, uhm... weird... I'm curently taking ...

Thank you very much for taking your time and reading this, I really do appreciate it. :)

Oh, and an update: I noticed that at some parts you use language in the kind of 'it troubled him greatly'. That okay, I am totally for that, but if ...

Uhm, I was browsing the forums, and I stumbled upon your story again, lol. What I realised (after a bit of skimming) is that even though the picture is the ...

Thanks for taking your time and reading, I really appreciate it! I don't have the time write now, but in a few hours I'll probably come back and re-check my ...

Wow, there are already other comments. Sorry if I repeat (I was eating supper in the meantime, lol), but as I was writing I could not refreash my page and ...

Eeeh, okay, I'm not goint to critic a critic, BUT -I actually liked the parts about the elves. They where interesting. Quote (Snoink): This part, like the grotty part, should ...

Uh, Izzy? Could you format and add spaces after full stops? When you do that, I'll come back and write a critic for you. If I accidentally foreget, PM me ...