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Oh, one more thing: you have explanitory instead of 'explanatory' in you subjet description. :) -elein

Then read it, lol! There are elves, mwahahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Well, okay, they're not really the main character, but they're there nevertheless). -elein

-Well, you don't become a good crictic at the snap of your fingers, do you? Uhm, well, sorry if you turn out to be something in the form of an ...

Uhm, well, I just wanted to say that I've been looking for chapter 1...

Sorry for the suggestions in style, but again, those are only suggestions, lol. For my part I will just say that I always had an subjective point of view (subjective ...

Oh, ok, its an exerpt. Sorry.

If they ever make a film out of this, tell 'em to give "Loosing my religion" to Dayla's dying scene. Please, lol.

Back to Natalia's confession, lol. As I said it was interesting, but a bit abrupt. I mean, from what I know, you have 2 books about her children, don't you? ...

Oh, and to the gnomes: Maybe you should expand that dialogue a bit? Put emphasize on the fact that they're 'very hyper and exciteable, and tend not always to make ...

Yes that one! That is one of my fave books, lol. :)

You ask for critiques - I give you one. Short, I admit, but nevertheless it is a critique, is it not? But the critic cannot edit your story, can he? ...

I think that you should leave the 'my last drink part', but the story really IS confusing at times. (At some point I thought that it was Nigel who was ...

Okay, I corrected all the mistakes that have been pointed out and more (LoL) To Lilyy03: I know it can be a bit confusing, but in Poland we us the ...

Uhm... I have no idea how to help you out here (to move this, i mean). -Maybe you should catch a moderator? Anyways, as to writing in fiction: You have ...

If it's not poetry then why is it in the poetry section? Fiction woukd be better, I think...