Esmé

Yup! Witcher in English -shudders*

Hey, this is only the beginning, isn't it? Other Angels can still come... -elein

yeah o.k. bad first attempt but i'll try again! Hey, it wasn't that bad, lol. -But that's the attitude, I'll keep my fingers crossed for you! -elein

Oops, I suppose I didn't tell you what exactly was confusing, did I? Sorry. :) -Minor, but scattered all ove the text mistakes are a problem here -You changed times. ...

I agree with Jenita in the subject of your beginnig. It was some sort of contrast to what happens later. -elein

Also, he's of age now? Why don;t you describe what he's feeling etc? Talk a bit more about Voldemort. And, this is the beggining of book seven? JK Rowling always ...

Was skimming through zour storz and: quote: We have time, my lord. The manticore replied, we may be late, but we shall destroy them none the less. Wouldn't it be ...

As to the noises… I liked that part… I kept it :S -Though that might submit to change, lol. "Slowly, out of the darkness, the coming nearer and nearer figure ...

What do you think of the story and where it is leading? Mhm… I think it’s pretty interesting, to tell you the truth. I’m not going to tell you where ...

Rosin 2 Quote: Of course, there were a few tourists, going over to Mingar; the worlds second largest city to Laigar, the Capital of the Empire. Don’t understand the necessity ...

Ah, sorry, didn't paste the first part from Word. Quote: “This, my fellows is fossilised Dragon bone.” Comma after ‘fellows’? Quote: Carefully he took the bone off the table and ...

“You never change Rosin,” ‘You will never change‘? And comma after ‘change’ Quote: Very well, take a few from my department but if the scholars come knocking on my doors ...

Okay, I started to read the Rosin part, it really took me in but got to go for now. Just wanted to paste the mistakes I found so far, because ...

Looklooklooklook! -is out of breath* No, seriously, he's a really good author, lol. -elein

quote: And what exactly do you mean by "won't say outloud"? Is it unpronounceable? Exactly that :) Oh, maybe it's just me, don't worry. Here the comment at least three ...