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So I finally got to your piece :D Sorry you had to wait so long… And I see that almost everything has been covered :D Quote: He snapped the pitiful ...

Hello, Guess I’m in a crit mode, hehe. Can’t keep away. Quote: “Captain Pierce, the king has requested your presence immediately!” shouted Sophie’s maid, still banging on the door. Details, ...

Okay, so I realize that I am wayyy back, but I didn’t really have much time lately. But, lol, it seems that I can’t keep away… Quote: While the sun ...

Hello, I’ll be writing the crit as I read, ok? Quote: Life went on as it usually did. The birds flew, the sun rose and set, and people went on. ...

Hello, Are you new? Didn’t see you around yet, so - welcome to YWS. Okay, sorry to start out like this, but: -> Spelling : Proofread your work before submitting ...

Hello, Found it, lol. :) I see you've got some very good crits, so I don’t know if I'll write anything constructive here. I'll probably just repeat what everyone said, ...

I read some of her books. Mostly because there wasn;t anything else to read, but I liked them. :) Have you read her books when she writes as Jayne Castle ...

Finally have enough time to read this! Haha, first thing once I got on the site… Quote: Creiha, the sun is shining for you. You are not a doormat, so ...

Shortest chapter? Too bad, lol. Quote: “I can’t move on. We have to stop,” she muttered in a wavering voice, and, for a moment, she thought she saw Sray-Valom in ...

‘llo, How’re you? Basically it’s the title that made me come here, it sounded so cool, lol. I’ll be writing the critique as I read. Prologue Quote: Failing fires flickered ...

Okay, so I’m finally here xD Sorry it took me so long, but I was a little short wit time lately. Currently sick, so theoretically I have time. Quote: Brenna ...

Ello DFA, How’re you? Didn’t really see you around here, are you new? Anyway, I’ll be writing the crit as I read. Quote: In the early morning hours, with the ...

Okay, I really don’t wan to start any kind of discussion as far as spelling goes, that has already been done, lol. Bear with me if I do, though. I ...

Quote: From the moment Jerome woke up that Friday morning he could feel that something strange was going to happen. Comma would be useful somewhere up there. Quote: He did ...

Hm... Okay, I admit. I just skimmed this. But what I saw scared me. a) Punctuation b) Grammar I'm not saying that I'm perfect or something, but I really think ...