Esmé

Hello, Thanks for posting your writing on YWS. It was the “occult” subtitle more than anything else that drew me in, and as it’s (for now) my type of writing, ...

Hello, I wanted to say that this was a very interesting and powerful piece of writing. Short, but nevertheless powerful and unique, and there doesn’t seem to be any problem ...

Stevie, So I finally got to critiquing your story, yes? Sorry it took so long, but as you know, I was absent for quite a long time on YWS. As ...

Hello Hunter, The first part of the critique will be a so-called line-by-line one. After that I’ll write character impressions, and tell you what I liked/disliked. Quote: Throughout his entire ...

It was actually the first sentence that made me read the rest - a very interesting start. It caught my attention. I will give you a line-by-line crit in the ...

Hello Stevie! My opinion is that no one on YWS should go without a review having posted, and should have at least one critique concerning their piece. Well, somehow you ...

Ch. 49..? For a moment I just froze and stared at it, really. XD Ah, and I was hoping for something nice and long… Mhm, Lusien’s here! I’ve taken a ...

… And I’m on Ch. 4 (or was it three?) of Book 1... *Blinks* Internal conflict, you say, and internal conflict I see. Poor Strick. From what I gather, has/needs/should ...

Okay, I’ll start of with a nitpicky, grammar and spelling wise crit, and then I’ll give you general impressions. So, here we go: quote: Not even the wisest would suspect ...

Firstly, I wanted to say (admit) that I haven’t read chapter one. So I’ll try to refrain from asking stupid question which answers are quite obvious. Secondly, I’ll try not ...

Hey, welcome to YWS. You're new, yes? No offence, but this is the wrong place to post your story. Move it to Fiction, you'll get crits over there. Also, it's ...

Twilight, my love. And OMG did you just say that there's no Edward in book 2? :( :( :( (Haven't read it yet). :( I think I fell in love ...

Lol, I came to YWS only to check one post, and that I see… this. Just had to read it. :D :D Quote: This was MY territory, not its. ‘Its’ ...

Hey! Haven’t seen you around here yet :D Anyway, I’ll be writing the crit as I read. Quote: unconscious of how the sunlight glanced along the back of her chair, ...

Hello :D I’ll be writing the crit as I read. General crit (not spelling and grammar, argh) at the end :D Quote: i typed this up cuz i wuz bored ...