Esmé

BigBadBear - I’ll cut the apologies for the delay and continue with the critique ^^ Quote: Now all that was left were notes. Very nice. 1) Are the characters credible? ...

Ashley - after some delay, but I’m here. T’would be impossible for me to stay away any longer, heh. Quote: Lyra helps me dress, as usual. Today, I wear more ...

BigBadBear - after a fashion, but I’m here : ) Sorry for the delay! Quote: Mom wouldn’t suddenly throw me into the car and drive me here. Ah, but we ...

Wisemann210 - hello, welcome to YWS. It’s a very, very, very addicting site (yes, that was a warning, heh). But, before I continue with your review - there’s one very ...

HC - hello and welcome to YWS. It’s an awesome and very, very, very addicting site : ) But, onward with your review, no? (sorry for the delay - you ...

JFW1415 - last part? Aw. Quote: My mother has to go to another room she’s crying so hard, but people pretend not to notice. First part awkward, consider rephrasing? Quote: ...

JFW1415 - I had a nice, long critique typed up, but the wham. And as there are no batteries in my laptop… Yes. Well. I’ll try to repeat what I ...

Layelun, It’s horrible, no? To have dozen of ideas floating around your mind, and somehow not be able to put them on paper? Been there a million times… *self-pity. But, ...

Dream-Writer, Hello, and (a little late) welcome to the site. However, there is one thing that I really must say before continuing with your critique - at YWS, to post ...

Eliza, Hello, welcome to YWS, and thanks for posting your work. However, we do have a ratio, and that would be 2:1. For every piece of your own that you ...

KJ, To tell the truth, I think that this is my favorite chapter. I mean, I do like all of them - your writing is just awesome - but this ...

JFW1415 - I like my intros, and though rarely do I have anything to say in them, I still continue with the tradition. This shall be no exemption, heh, even ...

spaced_out, Fanfiction, aye? Well, that “Review for Food” section certainly broadens my horizon as a critiquer ^^. I’ve never read or watched this, but I’ll try to do my best. ...

JFW1415, Second installment, aye? That’s the perk of being one of the last to read. You never have to wait for the next post. *smiles. PART I Quote: We didn’t ...

JFW1415, My critique shall be as pieced as your story is, and so you’ll get impressions, likes/dislikes for each part after the line-by-line review of each piece separately, since I ...