EmmaJane

Thank you for reviewing, guys! :smt003 I was thinking I left this too long to start posting again... Miriam - Thank you for the extensive review! As usual - I ...

Thank you Bluepetra and Kinla! I've edited it now, everyone. Please tell me what you think! I mean, can you tell I've just added that part on? Does it differ ...

carelessaussie13 - Thank you. ^^ As for the jagged line, do you mean what the children are saying or the description following it? Meadow - Thank you also! I know, ...

Hello again, Irish! Ha... This is my final review! (And my 100th! :D) Sit back and enjoy! :) ...and stepped toward me her arms out but hesitated... ...and stepped toward ...

Hello again, Irish! How was your christmas? Oh, and a happy new years eve! :smt003 Shame there aren't any new years smilies... :( Oh well, I'll have to make do ...

Why should you feel awkward? Everyone makes mistakes. And no, not too much work needed. I got a good sense of what was happening, and who was who. Despite knowing ...

Hello! I'm back! Sorry about that. :) To cautiously walk towards his prey, then, when the man (hopefully) has his back to the crowd, Altair will strike with the silver ...

"How much do you need to buy?," I asked him Noo! remove the comma - you don't need it 'cause you're asking a question. Don't use the comma if you ...

Oops, sorry. Spotted some wrong advice which I'd given you. Inside the school was impossibly full, every corner people greeting each other, girls squealing in excitement, footballs flying on the ...

Hello again! Here's the next part of my review! :smt003 I leaned down to whisper in the fox’s ear “Lets go Sasa,” she shot forward I missed this in my ...

Oh, whoa. The end was ... creepy? I'm unsure how to describe my feeling of unease after that. O.o Much better than the first. I loved your opening line, and ...

Hey. I'm considering continuing this. Should I? O.o Or should I leave it as it is? Please say. :D My love, ~Emma

Well I thought it was good. :P :D Beth, glancing through the edited piece, my only concern is that you put things in the same sentence, when really they'd sound ...

In answer to your question = it won't. Ever. If someone's already reviewed it's unfair to suddenly take it away from them. Though it sucks. I know. :( ~EmmaJane~

Ha ha! I'm back to finish my review! So, where was I? Ah... Without it she would cripple up and die Cripple up? I believe the expression is "curl up ...