Emma

Heehee, Sorry Sam, I'm soo stupid. Slap me!

This is quite good, though it isn't my type tea... Actullay I don't like tea. Okay then it's not my type of hot chocolate!

No it's okay. I did that because I wanted the reader to be confused. I wanted them to want to read to find out what is happened. I see I ...

That is really nice. It follows the same beat, if you know what I mean. It isnt rigid, but smooth...

Its too short, but what you have here is good.

Sorry, I think my story is going no where. It ends here, and for those people who wanted to find out what the nurse's secret was and what happens (because ...

SAVE THE PLANET. LET THE CANS LIVE AGAIN. LIVESTRONG. That is all I have to say on this matter.

Its not junk! DONT CALL IT JUNK. I think it just needs a little, looking at. Make it longer, try harder at it. P.s This is coming from a person ...

I didn't get it. Though as usual, thats me.

Its a good story. I liked it and you should keep it up. Good for you! Yey!

Wow this is great! Its like WOW.

It is very good so far. Though it didn't get me hocked at the beginning. Keep it up and I cant wait to see the second half.

You'll find out soon why she says it so many times. Other nurses don't do it much? Do they? :?

Yer, at least the only first mistake. Before I used too many I's. I had to like cut down on them big time!!

Jack, its the way Suzie speaks, not everyone needs to speak standard English in a story.