Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
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I walked along the ground, crushing the crinkled leaves that lay in my way.
Thoughts of butterflies and birds swirled in my head, there was nothing more beautiful then them in the world, nothing that I would see, nothing that anyone would see. Never again anyway. Everything that was kind and beautiful in this world was either gone or soon gone.
Well we're starting off on quite a gloomy note there. Given the title of this piece I suppose that isn't necessarily that big of a surprise here...so let's see whereabouts this might be trying to head in. From the start of things here there's a good sense of something ominous building up but there's not quite enough detail for us to come to much of a conclusion about anything here, so let's see how things develop.
I stopped my awkward steps and turned to the bright yellow sun. Long oaks reached their branches to the sky, to heaven.
Their little leaves blew in the breeze, waving to me, waving hello, waving goodbye, it didn't matter to some people. But to me they were waving goodbye, "Goodbye" "Goodbye" "Goodbye"
Okay this is an interesting contrast there to be slipping into. The imagery there with the trees seems more like the sort of thing you would see on a much calmer note in most stories but here that sort of calmness lends itself in a bit of a more eerie note with these goodbyes and while that calmness is still somewhat there, its mixed in with something a lot closer to fear here.
Tears sprang from my eyes, they were waving goodbye, I knew they would. They waved to me the same way they waved to my sister; slowly and kindly, but goodbye all the same. "Goodbye" "Goodbye" "Goodbye"
"Goodbye," I said and turned to walk up through the trees up trough the branches up to the sky, up with my sister.
Well that ending certainly seems to sum up the general sense this opening gave us there. Its quite a bit shrouded there but I get the feeling this person just went through some sort of death related situation and they ascended into some sort of afterlife towards the end. It certainly matches up with the imagery we had going on so far and I think its therefore proceeds to wrap itself up quite nicely here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Do i have a problem or does everyone else?
Had to add the double-space in there for fun.
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