Emma

LOL! Thanks. I didn't realise how intense it was. Sorry.

I understand. It is a overused idea, specially with teens. Emo behaviours are not accepted, it's just extremely common. It's all the same plot with a lot of young teenagers ...

That's how my idea came from. It makes you wonder, is everything around us actually real? Or is it a figment of our own made up imaginations? Just like dreams. ...

Aha. That's the mystery of it all. The reader has to guess, but you should be able to guess some of it, for example, she's certainly not sane. :lol: Thanks ...

I am disturbed. You are sick but I love it. When you said he undid the boys jeans I thought he was going to chop something else off, but that ...

A very original idea. I enjoyed this very much and can not wait until you bring out chapter two. I don't have much to say when it comes to criticizing ...

Thankkk you.:]

Can you please break it up? It is a bit hard to read with everything so close together, thanks.

You really are immuture arent you. I wasn't aiming it at you BleedingHeart. Only the first line. The rest was for Mossie. I'll make it more clearer next time.

Thanks. I tried changing it a bit more. I finished this at about 1 in the morning, so my work kind of deteriorated towards the end.

Wow, it really caught my attention. It felt so real, as if you've been here before. If not; then you're amazing at getting into the character. You have talent. Keep ...

Haha thank you very much for the help. I do understand where you are coming from Snoink. As it was done more than half a year ago. I just wanted ...

So any tips or help?

Wow, the detail and thought put into this is outstanding. One can tell that you put great thought into this piece. I can clearly visualize what is going on. You ...

Gaia, are you from Drytear? =/ Change the attitude. We're only helping, don't act like a child. Act your age. (If you can.)