EmiAnne

This sounds like a really, really good start to a story. I hope you get the next part up soon so I'm not in suspense for forever! First: I like ...

This is a really good start! Some of your wordings need help, though: In teh second paragraph, she says that she is "forgetting her own disability" when "She opened her ...

You've got so much emotion in both parts- and they;re both so good! The only thing i can say is that when they all see the ambulance going by and ...

Really good and fun to read. I love love love your plot twist, but it was pretty confusing to read, even after reading the explanation. You could make all the ...

Hiya! I'm guessing this is not set in America. I love your names though. Maybe you set the setting up a little more though? It seems sort of strange. Khushi ...

Well, that was sort of random. It comes together eveentually, but until the end and until I've read it a few times I do not understand it. :arrow: nice that ...

I like this a whole bunch. You have heart- wrenching little things that almost everyone struggles with, but makes them bigger and makes you pity him. Or her. Whichever it ...

I agree- your story was moving quicker then I could keep u p with. Maybe start the story slower. Like, maybe set up her and her husband in a happy ...

Very, very pretty. You have excellent description but not too much, like jemjive said, so it leaves me some room to think up myself. The first stanza is wonderful and ...

Hiya I like your story premise, and I like all your settings. Your characters are okay, but I don,t get why Luke is the angel, though I do get why ...

Hiya! Starting off, I super duper like your story (I'm totally giving it a star or liking it or whatever it is) but there are a few things- Her tanned ...

Hi! I'm Kelly and I'll be your reviewer today!!!! :D I like her general attitude towards the world, but she doesn't seem nineteen. She sounds maybe 15, tops. :arrow: The ...

Hey! I totally loved your story. Like everyone said, awesome twist! :?: would a guy and a girl really get placed in a cabin together? :arrow: You should make the ...

I like your story a whole bunch! :D I like how you progress up to her being dead, from her worrying all the way up to her yelling at the ...

Awww, that was a nice, sweet and cute story! I didn't see any typos I think, and... well, you write really good. Wow, you have a whole bunch or reviews ...