Emerson

How would you suggest to "tidy up the rhythm"? I'm new to poetry, and poetry editing... I'm glad you are...indifferent on it? At least it isn't horrible.

and that is fine, you can go ahead and disagree with my critiques. But if you are going to want to make it like that then you should do it ...

ah, one quick note, there is a convenient 'edit' button up in the top right hand corner of your posts, its better to 'edit' them, rather than to repost (unless ...

So in the next chapter you describe Yori? That is perfectly fine, but its kind of a "thing" about writing, you want to introduce your characters as quickly as possible, ...

I think there is another thread about this book somewhere. (You should probably look for that one, a double is kind of superfluous) I posted there ;-)

That rock cool! I think a pet rock would be nice; you wouldn't have to worry about sporadic scissor attacks.

Then perhaps you should tell us it is a story outline. And why are you showing us your story outline? It is not the actual story, so why should we ...

i have always felt that the actual language used was a little bland. Personally i put this down to translation I also blame it on translation, and just like you ...

So you're going on a Nabokov craze? Nice. I wish I was.

Begins with a Q, if I remember correctly? If I remember correctly, didn't Hum name Quillty after an uncle of his? Because the man looked like his Uncle? I remember ...

thank you :-) I know people are probably talking behind my back about my lack of ANY edit, but hey I'm a busy (and procrastinating) person. EVENTUALLY, this will be ...

Vampirewolf: " (or double quotes) are an American thing. ' (single quotes) are used in Europe (don't hold me to that, I know France uses < and > ) She's ...

I liked everything except the word "crystal"

what was your favorite part, myth? I liked when Svidrigailov (sp?) killed himself. And when he had Dounia all cornered in the room.

I suggest this book to no one!!!! It scared me. Horribly. I should go add this to my 'books I hate list' over in that other thread. SCARY BOOK! I've ...