Emerson

Chapter Three I chewed the end of my paint brush in a suggestive manner. Before me was the bare body of my wife and a canvas. Rather than painting for ...

I liked it. The meaning behind it is great. but yeah "playdough" is too silly a word for the narrator who sound so serious and stern. If you lightened up ...

You are reading a polish version of Lolita? Hmm... I hope its good. The whole wonder of Lolita is the way it is written, and translations always leave room for ...

Chapter Two The intruding delivery men had stopped coming and our hideout was beginning to look more like a household. I feared Fleur was becoming too attached; she had already ...

I did minor edits mentioned by bubble and Sam finally! Sam: I loved your advice, but I think I'm going to take it up and embrace it when I get ...

You're mixing first, second, and third person points-of-view, and that technique generally doesn't work well. I'd have to say, I don't care :-D Thank you for all the comments though! ...

Came back, finally... No. Before you go looking others missing a word? Loved the humor, and the drama, and the smartness. “Jonathon—get laid.” Nice comment to bring back :-D

*feels awesome* yay, I'm affective! *Is proud* Thanks you guys! It means so much to me :-)

added zee note.

:-D This is so awkward for me; not one major problem! *feels successful* though it was rather short... Who thinks I should take up more satire?

Yeah its crap without the background. Should I give an authors note on the background of the poem?

Thanks Imp :-) your link is broke though hee. no quote marks. I'll check it out.

Thanks all. Yeah DD, I'm...surprised this got out. Or anything got out at all. (Just woke up from another random sleep cycle) My ll's and my ls', I'll have to ...

Bubbles: Thanks all the same, and I think you are looking into it too far into it. This is actually a joke on Prince and when he changed his name ...

It's too late for me to read this; tomorrow, I swear, but why don't you get rid of the space in between each line? It'll go easier on the eyes, ...