Published November 12, 2006
I created this for a speech I had to make in an English class. Ever since then, it's been quite controversial amongst my acquaintances. I would like to know what others think about it.
Life is like playdough. It comes in all colors, all shapes, and all sizes. You can make your playdough into whatever you want. People are going to come along and try to ruin what you are beginning to make, but you cannot let them crush your playdough. Don't let them take it away from you either, they have their own playdough to worry about. Most importantly, never give up on what you are trying to make. One day it will be finished, and then all the hard work will finally pay off. You gain satisfaction in what you make, and you gain in life exactly what you put into it. It all comes together, it represents you, and it is no better, or greater, than the next person's playdough.
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
141,379 Literary Works • 674,383 Reviews
cadmium said: look, life can be like anything.
It's true. I see it all the time. A highlighter, a meal, a phone. It really doesn't matter what you're comparing it to, although I really do like the playdough comparison. It's thought provoking.
I disagree with this, playdough is fine. Its adds a little bit of fun.
I really that, Good Job!
Chill out. Life can be almost everything. You should expand it, and include your experiences. You should also use some quotes from Plato, Shakespeare or whatever. But it was inspirational (regardless of playdough).
"Life is like a box of chocolates."
"Life is like a roller coaster."
Look, life can be like anything. My friend and I once played a game where we related random objects in her garage to life. It can be done: sidewalk chalk, wrenches, flat tires, all can be related to life if you have a speck of imagination. This is not original. It is cliche to the sixteenth power, as most inspirational speeches are.
As an inspirational speech, it is successful, I'll give you that, if your target audience is that of sobby English teachers and people who like "Extreme Makeover: Home Edition".
Also, how can it be controversial? I'd like to know just what the controversy was over a sappy life metaphor.
I can see that it's well-written and structured, with few errors. Apply those skills to something more original.
Colleen
Very simple but it contains a really good metaphor for this estranged game of Life we've got going on.
I agree with everyone else that "play dough" distracts from the tone of the piece. Changing it to "clay" would help it.
Great work!
LUNA
thats really cute.
I like! It's got big serious ideas in it, but you stop it sounding overly pretentious by using "playdough". Very clever, and rather neat.
I liked it. The meaning behind it is great. but yeah "playdough" is too silly a word for the narrator who sound so serious and stern. If you lightened up the voice you were using then it would work better.
I disagree with this, I think playdough is a perfectly appropriate word, because I believe life shouldn't be taken too seriously. I feel the word playdough adds humour to this theory and shows the reader how something as simple as life can be compared to something so simple and childlike.
I like the playdough idea. I think it juxtaposes a serious message with a fun thought and also presents the ideology an a witty way.
but thats just my opinion of course.
It draws a very clear parallel. I like the idea.
The idea of "playdough" is actually great. Because this is a serious idea but it's also comical because it's playdough. And can't life be comical and serious just the same?
As always,
Miss POKE
What else are you supposed to change playdough to?! I like it. It sums up most of life, just the way it is. Keep writing!
RR*
I agree that playdough is too silly a word fot the style of writing you have chosen. Even just switching it to clay would, in my opinion, add a lot to the piece. Really good, though, and an unteresting perspective.
I really like that
Well the words are inspirational, and it sounds good. But the word "playdough" is kind of contradictory in this style. It's almost as if it's too silly of a word to be used this seriously.