Emerson

*dies in amazement* You know, I'm shocked xD Thank you dreamy! Am I really that good? You all know I don't truly believe that. No, no, no, no, me, good? ...

Colly- Perhaps you don't need to lengthen, but simply improve with what you have already given us? Word choice is an amazing thing! ;-) As for leaning to much onto ...

Glad to see I could make people laugh :-D I was really hoping to write part 0.02, but I kind of jumped ship with a lot of things I was ...

Being the cheep-o I am, I found a few books on that satisfied (somewhat) my language craving. The German one was a dud, sadly. But my Russian book is great ...

Yep a third book in August. I just got my hands on New Moon and I have to say, though I am still reading it, I'm horribly disappointed. Perhaps I ...

The much debated grammar of the line was changed, and I think I like it better this way. Still hoping to receive more feedback, though. (One can never be too ...

Wow, I hadn't realized this had gotten so many comments.... I probably won't be editing this, or adding more to it. I wrote it to get by with something for ...

In reply to the new edits you made with indents, since you told me you intended to do that, but didn't know how... It reads much better. Ignore number two ...

Rieda> Thanks for always being so generous in your comments :-) Mad> "I sink, nor swim..." I'm not sure sure that I am missing a word? Although "I don't sink, ...

Actually, I think the colon defines it so much better than a semicolon could. The whole poem is about the note book, the colon kind of says "This is the ...

I'm glad I could write something cute :-) I'm not much for haiku either... Thanks everyone for the compliments!!

I forget how much I edited of Chapter five. You all must keep in mind I have lost almost all will and want. -- Chapter Six Alexei stood outside the ...

Thanks :-) I'll edit as soon as my laziness goes away. And, actually, I have written a few things of fantasy before I came here, I keep convincing myself to ...

Wasn't oh-so-bad. Some things a little cliche, like stopping something in its tracks and "liquid crystal". But something major: take out the emoticon. It's poetry, we already get the sadness ...

Alright, edited. You might mention how he's doing these things--with his mind alone? Is he gesturing at all, like a pupeteer might? I didn't do this, only because I'm not ...