Emerson

First of, don't forget to punctuate! This will help you: Poetry & Punctuation . It wasn't a bad poem, but it was a bit too scattered and abstract for me. ...

Yeah, this isn't poetry. So I'm going to move it to other fiction. Also, it's much too short of a story for us to actually give a good critique on. ...

I have to agree, these seems like lyrics. For me, they were too bland an unoriginal. I can't exactly tell what you are talking about, I can only guess. Worse ...

You will want to put more up, this isn't really enough for people to critique. Somewhere between 500 words and 2,000 words is a good length, but one paragraph isn't ...

Don't forget to capitalize the pronoun I. :D The only thing this poem makes me think is: why is she afraid? If you could explain to us, or better yet, ...

Don't forget to capitalize the pronoun I. Honestly? I didn't like it. There isn't any imagery to it, and I don't feel anything. It doesn't really make sense, and I ...

This was a bit too redundant. you kept repeating some lines. Also, you don't have any punctuation really, and the subject of the poem is kind of abstract. Your probably ...

I think it's interesting that you purpose it is a friend who killed you, and that they'll only do it again. It's alright. It's a lot of telling, though, which ...

Like your last poem I critiqued, this just doesn't have a lot in it. You've been posting a lot of poetry, real fast. I would suggest you slow down, and ...

This is my first chapter in a co-written story with another user on YWS. Just a note, you should probably mention who the other author is so you give them ...

First, as you'll notice, not a lot of people post poetry with polls, especially if the polls have nothing to do with the poem. Even still, adding a poll to ...

Can a heart, once loved, be found bleeding silent, not a sound, sadness evident, forever bound, down upon the blackened ground. You know, I'm not entirely sure what I think ...

Woo for Italo Calvino! If on a Winters night a traveler is an amazing book. I've recommended it to several people, though, and I think only a few of them ...

The paint’s chipped in some spots (some meaning most). I don't like the aside here a whole lot. It just seems strange? I'd say just say most in the actual ...

This was... alright. But more towards the negative side of alright. >_> Just because you're making fun of my space, doesn't mean it has to be a badly written poem. ...