Emerson

I nodded eagerly[s], excitement flooding my veins[/s]. I think you could survive without this part. I know how tempting it is to say something like that (I do it too!) ...

I read this in 8th grade, and this book depressed everyone, but it really upset me. There were so many places I wanted to cry. My great aunt is mentally ...

Words can drive a person mad, Then over to happy and sad. Happy and sad are bland words. They're flat. Be colorful in your word choice. But no, I say ...

I will just be entirely honest and say I did not like it. Which is OK because I will tell you why so you can fix it. This was just ...

Lie together indiscriminately, Red and gold and blue and green. indiscriminately is an ugly word, and the last line here is kind of ugly too. What's poetic about a list ...

A hand is the perfect girlfriend, Ronald Lynch thought as he stormed into the room he and his mother shared, slamming the door behind him. He knew the folks who ...

he world is fucked up, Carolina Smith thought as she sat down in her second period math class. If this is the first thing your reader is going to see ...

Hey Rose! I haven't seen you in forever, so I thought it would only be kind to rekick off our friendship with a critique. ^_^ “Hey,” a car pulled up ...

Oh, this is written better. :) I'm glad the ellipses are gone, but you still need punctuation! Don't neglect that punctuation is proper grammar. This might help you: Poetry & ...

I am here. :) As a note, I already found a nasty -ing verb! I won't mention any of them, though. Find them yourself; it will teach you how to ...

I am not sure if you have read the Before You Post thread yet, but it's suggested you don't post so much all at once, and this is a whole ...

Guten tag mein Freund! I am here to excavate good words. Or something. It hadn't been cut, hadn't been bastardized. I love your use of the word bastard here. You ...

If you can’t take the words like “penis” and “vagina” seriously…omg, put this down and go get laid already. You're incredebly, horrendously patronizing, like Saint said. All I can do ...

Hehe, well, Crysi doesn't know where to start, so in a way I'll finish her post. Consider buying or finding these books at your local library: Writing Fiction by Gotham ...

Her body lay curled on her side, her head resting on her arm as rays of light warmed her skin. You managed to use the word "her" four times in ...