Emerson

Heh, like Sleeping Valor said, I can't help but fix your title. I looked at it and couldn't understand it. Oo les bons vieux temps ou nous etions si malheureux ...

Ohmigosh. I want to cry looking at the lyrics. It's so fitting. And so sad. You really don't know. Smoke? That's a really huge theme, haha. This is so so ...

Nothing better than rolling around in Romantic Transcendentalism! I really loved this. Real Dickinsonesque, with simple speech. Just like her, it hides behind "Oh, well, there are fleas..." but then ...

I felt my body crash into the cement, heard my skull crack on the corner and I drifted down into the water. as a compliment, that made me squirm. Just ...

It's interesting but really scattered. Stars, see them high. And you. Get high. Off of them. Your punctuation breaks here are all too abrupt. That smile you smiled through your ...

Hello my Dearest Darling! Since I am sans D and munching, I thought I should work on this instead... Like those who came before them, Mr. and Mrs. Fletcher did ...

I like it, but it isn't one of my favorites by you. Not at all. What is poetic about it? It's like a story in verse. And sure you can ...

It's pretty writing, but I don't see what it is doing for me and why I should care. Also, that is all it is. Pretty writing. Where is the thing ...

Eep! keep in mind that bumping up your posts isn't good! This was OK. I loved the imagery you used with the rose shaking off its dew, but the ending ...

Alright, well, I'll get past the fact that I'm insulted and try to critique this. Why not, instead of preaching to your reader, you try to present to them why ...

Woah. First off, your line breaks are way too short. And for that matter, what are you trying to say? This is really all that can be gotten out of ...

This is cute! The only thing I can think to complain about is flow. Read it out loud; it doesn't flow in place, most notably the "I am not that ...

Welcome to YWS! First a few pointers: review people before posting your own work! It is only polite, and we do have a 2:1 review-post policy. Which goes to the ...

You need to keep in mind that a poem isn't about the speaker ( or the poet) but about the audience. Write for your audience. Make me feel your depression ...

There are no cries of grief, nor any of triumph, there is only that omnipresent silence; the half-burnt corpse still spins, twirling around and around, a scarred ballerina oblivious to ...