Emerson

Hello there! I thought I would let you know that I shortened your line breaks. If line breaks are too long, then the front page of YWS stretches out. Also, ...

Well, I've never read The Book Thief though it is on my list of books to read, and I've heard it's good. Whether your beginning is similar to it's or ...

Hey there! I edited your post because your line break was too long and stretched out the first page. Also, just a note on the hospitalized code. You have to ...

We don't suggest you delete literary works because then people loose their post/review points, and those are valuable things! But I will lock this for you. You can also remove ...

I'm going to be outrageously useless. The flag of Fates lies over me now To me it reads better as: The flag of Fate lies over me now, so it ...

Well, it's rather Dialogue-tag, dialogue-tag, and no break up from that, but that's just because of the contest, so despite that, it isn't so bad. There are no craft across ...

Welcome to the YWS! If You have any questions about the site or need help finding something, feel free to PM me. First of all, you haven't done any reviews, ...

The rhyme scheme is restraining and annoying. Rhyme schemes are so difficult to do well because they almost always sounds childish and forced. It tends to make people write around ...

I've read Intensity - I think that's what it was. That was very good. I could never finish False Memories because it scared me too much. Not to mention it's ...

Flem! “You’d think so. [s]So[/s] having been effectively disemboweled, he died right here.” why are there missing limbs?” Change to: why are the limbs missing? If I understood the ending ...

He pillowed his head with his aunt’s clothing donations for the orphanage and stared at the ceiling, a fan clicking behind twisted wires somewhere on the floor near his ear ...

Well, that was an awesome demonstration of a character whatsits for me, I have to say. I'm being nitty picky. ^^ and Wal Mart pajamas Isn't it Wal-Mart? Leila waited. ...

I couldn't help myself, even if I should be doing Hausaufgauben. It's you, cranes, and The Decemberists. Woah, okay, you're going to cut the first two paragraphs and do that ...

Hello there! This is interesting because there's a lot of emotion in it, and a lot of curious things. The way you execute it, though, makes it uncomfortable. First of ...

So, your image was stretching out the front page and [s]I put it in a spoiler[/s] I made it an attachment. I'm not certain the spoiler code worked when it's ...