Emerson

Hello there Aero! Ralph crawled up behind him, groping through the morass in in jury. I'm going to be incredibly picky, the two "in" sounds one after another bothers me ...

good but could be turned into something better. In some cases you need more punctuation. Can you see me [?] I hide behind a layer of pain and untruths, I ...

I liked the idea of the poem. But it could be cut down to so little. A lot of the lines you use to describe are rather superfluous. moons pull ...

Can I sum up what I just read: Oh no, your scared! but you are only scared of yourself, and you are a shadow that you don't know. Or something. ...

I rather liked it, I suppose because of the implied idea. I think it would work better punctuated. sorrow is something you learn to live with; like your fingers, your ...

It's pretty. But I don't think it has anything beyond that. And yes, Poetry... someone should move it. I have to say, it's bland. What are you giving us? Your ...

I will say that I didn't finish reading, and that I think this deserved an R rating. I could try hard to critique this, and pick it apart as I ...

Don't forget to end sentence in periods :-) you seem to have a lack of those. The lines don't have much rhythm and feel choppy. I'm not sure what I ...

I haven't much to say about the words (yet) but you seem to have forgotten that punctuation exists. Don't forget that key element. Otherwise it's difficult for me to read ...

Ah, I see everyone has already beat this, and I shan't beat the dead further. But: the lack of punctuation up until the end is disruptive. Punctuation creates a guide ...

Eh.. I'm not sure what to say? I'll try to be kind. First, the title? I'm not sure how it relates to the poem. There isn't any punctuation so if ...

It's...good. Though the main image is hard to follow. Someone drowns, right? With that kind of subject, you could bring in more imagery and less telling, and that would improve ...

Bonjour, I'm here :-) Nothing could have stopped me that afternoon, nothing could slow my legs, running using energy reserves from months of kit kats and mellow puffs or calm ...

Capitalize your I's. That is your first mistake. In your first stanza, the last line is cute, but you could have made it cuter. Try to do more than tell ...

why Is the grass green [semicolon, comma, or period. Some sort of punctuation here] is it sick? What make sthe places where i hide? Watch for typos. you rhyme now ...