Em16

Nice job with this piece! I love the way you structure it, so it starts out with Earl possibly dying of coronavirus. That adds an urgency and importance to the ...

I love the format of this piece! It’s so creative to have it start on the right side of the page, like in the east, and end on the left ...

First off, I love the first line. You’ve got a lot of elements of figurative language (imagery and alliteration), and it’s such a strong, definitive first line. There is so ...

Nice job with this piece! I love all the specific details, and the way you painstakingly take the reader through the history of scientific discoveries. There is a certain gravity ...

First off, I’d like to say I loved this piece. Honestly, I was expecting an actual recipe that someone had posted as a joke, and I was completely surprised and ...

I love this piece. It’s amazing. This is the perfect example of showing rather than telling. Instead of saying that a lot of people in your life are homophobic, you ...

Wow. I love all the imagery in this. Great job compiling a lot of different ideas and events and putting them all together. I love the way it starts and ...

I love this. You perfectly capture the feeling women have of being devalued. It’s so damaging to be a woman and know you have feelings and emotions and desires, but ...

Nice job writing a villanelle! I know how difficult those can be. You had some really good descriptions and comparisons, like where you say “putting the cages on display like ...

Hey! I’m Em16. This was a great first chapter. You start in medias res, in the middle of the action, and immediately hook the reader with action and intrigue. One ...

I love this. I love the way you deftly manipulate language to convey your point of view. It’s so beautiful. I also like the way you portion the poem off ...

Specific Comments: Line 1: I love the line “my mind is awake and my body is not”. It’s so contradictory, and yet so true. I completely understand the feeling you’re ...

Hey Parvikh! This was a great story. I loved the way you played with time, and wove together both the present and the past. I also loved the way you ...

Wow. This was a crazy story. You did a good job making sure there was always something going on. There were a lot of dynamic characters and situations, and there ...

I love this! Your writing style is amazing. I love the way it’s so straightforward; you’re telling it like it is. There’s also a hint of humor which makes it ...