EloquentDragon

ED here to review. First of all, this looks really promising. It's dark and angsty and very relatable (probably) to a lot of people. That being said, it's much too ...

I'm not reviewing, I'm just going to gush praises here. This is incredibly good! It's beautiful and heart wrenching at the same time. It grabs your emotion, captures exactly what ...

So, you seem to prefer vague and lyrical style in your poetry as opposed to any form of overtness. That's good, that's fine. It gives this a surreal, beautifully disconnected ...

Wow, this is really good. I can't find much to comment on. However, that could also be because this is just way too short. Please expand, this ends so suddenly ...

I only noticed a few sections here. Or I only took time to notice a few sections. ;) read comic books and dress up as Spider-man, “dressed.” Keep this in ...

I’m going to jump right in here: Merin sat with her legs crossed on her hard cot in the dark room one of the sisters had led her to with ...

ED here to review. First of all, I haven’t seen KA one or two, nor have I read the comics. So I have no presuppositions about what a character should ...

So, just going to say that I don’t really like Nekos, and I don’t really like shojo or romance. But I do like Japan, so here goes. And so, her ...

Well, ED here to review. First off, although you trimmed this down considerably, it’s still incredibly long. Generally, if you want more reviews, try not to submit anything that’s longer ...

Just a few things here: It's real tall, as it seems to extend forever. "Real" isn't a very good adjective, and sounds a bit odd here. And use "and it ...

Nitpicks on phrasing and details and such below. Lorin Briefly pausing here to ask you why you’ve chosen “Lorin” as this guy’s name. There’s nothing wrong with it per say, ...

"I want to be with you" These words have already left your lips. Now let my hands guide your hips, as we dance under this huge moon. The stars watch ...

This is not the Peru I remember. (Hah, we were in Lima, mundos en todos, diferentes.) Anyway, beautiful poem nonetheless. I love the color that you breathe into this. It's ...

I must say, the title is what caught my eye. I didn't even realize it was you until I clicked on it. (heh) Which means that this is a great ...

No one has reviewed yet? Well in that case I will. This section, I felt, was much weaker than your first one. Nitpicks below. They were having a picnic underneath ...