Elinor

Hi, For your first poem, I'm very impressed. This is an interesting idea and it sort of makes me think of Bambi or something else along those lines. You have ...

Hi, This is an interesting premise for a short story. You had a lot of clear emotion and character, and I'm always a fan of stories told from unconventional points ...

Hello! For being only one paragraph long, this definitely a solid piece. I definitely had a sense of character and conflict. It was suspenseful and I wanted to keep reading. ...

Hi! So, I'm curious to see where this story goes. Your title drew me in, but the three short paragraphs you have here left me slightly underwhelmed. I'm giving you ...

Hi! I'm Elinor, and welcome to YWS! So, this piece: the concept is certainly interesting, but it's very short. Too short to really make much of an impression, and to ...

Hi, This was very nicely done. I like the idea, how it's sort of experimental about also unconventional and original. Your voice is strong and you definitely have a way ...

Hello, I am somewhat of a novice at scripting myself, but I will try to help you in whatever way that I can. This is quite impressive for your first ...

Hey! I think you're off to a good start with this piece. It kind of makes me think of something out of a fantasy video game, and I say this ...

Hello, This poem really doesn't do much for me right now. You don't go into that much descriptive detail and it's not really about anything substantive. I'm sorry I don't ...

Hello, When I first read this I was confused and I didn't understand what was going on. It took me halfway through the second read through to understand the main ...

Hello, I don't know much about John Lennon or the Beatles. Did John Lennon even have a sister? I don't know, but I guess it doesn't really matter for the ...

Hi, I thought this poem was very nicely done. I grew up watching Disney movies and reading Harry Potter and Narnia, so reading this was a nice throwback to my ...

Hello! I really love this poem. I'm a sucker for celestial imagery, and think you executed it really well. You have a nice command of painting vivid images for the ...

Hello, You did a really nice job with this. It was raw and real and I definitely felt the emotion of the piece whilst reading it. You have a strong ...

Hello, This piece is adorable and it made me smile. It's a refreshing twist on what we might normally think of a superhero. You have a strong voice and interesting ...