Elena_Ravenhill

A round of applause. *applause* Now, for the review. *drumroll* The double spacing between stanzas, not really necessary. Lovely touch but not needed. Love the mixed of old English with ...

Well that is fact it has a nice flow to it but like you said some parts were poorly written and I can read that too. I got stuck on ...

Well I don't know where to start but you seem to have a prolem SPACING after the period. You have some Cap letters in your sentence like so: Her blue ...

“ 1.Hey, sorry. I know you probably hate me, but I wanted to know if you wanted to hang out today. 2.Just me and you. I really want to talk.” ...

It doesn't matter of the structure; it has a meaning and an image to it. So far it has a rhyme and a beat, it flows like silk. I love ...

yellow house at the end of the col-de-sac. Its spelled cul-de-sac. skinny lad with hair the color of sand and eyes the shade of parsley Try colour With a surprisingly ...

This is very touching, I can't see anything wrong but to space your stanzas. Its' so very heartfelt, so much drama and love. I've never seen such work, and lovely ...

You have a few grammar mistakes but that can't be helped. Especially its your first poem here in YWS, other than that its a very good poem. It has a ...

Wow! This is simply amazing, the last few sentences threw me off. Its true what they say; Don't judge a book by its cover. I didn't think that Narrissa would ...

Simply wonderful, it had that nice and gloomy ecstasy. It was very mind consuming; I was very confused The hits come You can change this to something else, but it ...

I would agree with Fiyero, the fist stanza was a bit confusing. Comedian and Clown are two different types of entertainers. Furthermore, it seems so rushed as if there was ...

Wow...its was so touching. I cried literally, my favorite verse was We loved for a time, Passionate and true. But soon we grew restless- Wandering spirits soon do. We each ...