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A little repetetive, but overall I really REALLY love this poem. This describes me so much, and you are able to put into words really well what I imagine a lot of people feel. So many people just hide behind emotions, whether they be happiness or anger, or whatever. This was really good!

Hi there! Welcome to YWS!

Now, I'm not a poem-writer, so I'm not going to pick at the mechanics. I just want to say that this poem is so true and the feeling behind it is so honest. I have just one problem:

Behind my smiles there are so many tears
Tears that only appear when Im alone
No one knows about my tears
I always try not to show my tears

Thank you all for your tips. I was a bit nervous when I this but I appericate the help. Thank you.

You have a few grammar mistakes but that can't be helped.
Especially its your first poem here in YWS, other than that its a very good poem.
It has a very good strong emotion to it.
Hopefully, I get to see more of your work.
Keep up the good work.

*~ER~*

I really liked this! It was a nice simple read. But...you need to capitalize all of your I's and capitalize each word that starts a new line. So it should look like this -

People think nothings wrong
Why?
Because they always see me smile
The way #0000FF ">I think of it
Behind every smile there is a tear
Behind all my smiles is how #0000FF ">I hide myself.
Hide myself from the world
Hiding so no one can know
Know what really can hurt me
Know what my real emotions are
Behind my smiles there are so many tears
Tears that only appear when #0000FF ">I'm alone
No one knows about my tears
I always try not to show my tears
It makes me feel weak
Behind all my smiles #0000FF ">there's always a lie
One thing is for sure #0000FF ">there's always sad feeling
Behind my smiles
#0000FF ">There always be hidden tears
#0000FF ">Tears that will forever hide my fears
#0000FF ">Behind all my smiles