EleanorRigby

Thanks, Stella! I'm going to re-draft this part of it before I post up the second part. I'll keep these things in mind and read that article when I have ...

Thanks so much! I'll do some editing and such later on, I think.

I loved it. I could really feel your emotion and it seemed very interesting, almost as if it could be a story. Good job.

I liked it a lot. I could sort of picture what you were describing in my head as you went along telling the story in the poem. Like Flower~Child said, ...

I thought this was good. I liked your other poem about the star better, but considering this was your first poem, it was really good. Nice job!

I loved it. I agree, pessimism isn't good. It makes things seem like they'll never be happy again. This poem embodied that. Good job.

Hahahaha! This was awesome. Loved it.

Loved it! Very humorous and clever. I've never read anything quite like it. :) Good job.

I loved it. I can't wait to read some more of your work! Keep writing! :)

Thank you! I wrote this a very long time ago, but I kept coming back to it, so I decided to post it and see what everyone thought. I might ...