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El-lyncho

  • Poetry » Other, General Re: After Midnight

    I like the consistency of the order of each line, it gives this slightly broken up poem a feel to it. However, it seemed to be the main thing that ...

    May 18, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Skies

    I like this.. fairly simple overall, but powerful. I really like I gaze above and look at myself, reflected by lonely grey clouds. Not so sure about repetition of 'realise' ...

    May 17, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Morning Tremors

    [Wow] :wink: Great poem, although it seems to slightly stray from the subject nearer the end from what I can see.. The unlucky one’s stayed to Needs to be 'ones' ...

    May 17, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Love; Understated

    That poem is definitely very powerful and seems to illustrates the point well of the unmovability of a strong feeling (i.e. love). The first time I read it through I ...

    May 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Race

    It's quite a sweet poem overall, could possibly be improved by more powerful language as it seems to slightly let down the overall feel. Oh, no she crossed the finish ...

    May 14, 2008


Should we not walk? On our feet? The ones I now have again? I do like my feet. They are befittingly perambulatory.
— Pattern (Rhythm of War by Brandon Sanderson)