Eimear

It's a bit self-concious to work as a short poem. There's no real ownership, and it gives the impression that it's been wrote in a hurry. It just seems rushed ...

I think this would work better if you dropped the ryhme, it's holding your thoughts and ideas back too much. You've got good descriptions, but focusing too hard on trying ...

Mark's pointed out most of the errors, and my opinion of your work hasn't changed since Chapter One. This is gathering momentum excellently. I can sense a dark atmosphere smouldering, ...

Hey, I thought I'd lost the link but this was relatively easy to find. Thanks for giving me it-because this was an interesting read! Very impressive. Forget all the grammer, ...

It's a thought provoking read- not life changing but not specific to one person, so I can relate it to myself. Nice job. I'm wondering is it right to put ...

It's our old gangsta friend! I'm happy to say that this poem was definately for me. It's got a great fitting title, supberb structure and rythmn, and the rhyming scheme ...

Ok, so here's the review as promised. I'll try to make it as in-depth as I can. So I liked the story, and the dialouge for the most part is ...

So I'm guessing that the 'Lake' is love or passion conceptualized into a physical thing- i.e plunging into the depths ect. It's good. Not anything to write home about but ...

Respect, dude. You've caused a strir, that's for sure. I don't know, there's aspects of this piece that are for me- the irony towards the end is good, almost hillarious ...

I think this is great-- and It's exactly how I felt today. After reading it I felt sort of better...however there are some issues which need to be raised. Aswell ...

This is dripping in teenage angst. Except a good type of angst. The sort we can all indentify with, I think...maybe I've interpretated it wrong. I hope I haven't- because ...

This is the sort of thing I love. The type of poem that you can easily imagine yourself in, feeling these types of emotions, such as staring out a window ...

Haha. Surprisingly good snippet. However I think you should develop this further into something bigger than that to give the true title of 'poem'. I just seems to leave the ...

I'm sorry, but you certainly haven't crossed the finish line in this piece. Number one, there's no use of punctuation whatsoever, which makes it a dull and surprisingly difficult read. ...

Hmmm, I did like this very much, I have to say. I could really relate to the speaker, you know? It spoke to me. However I disliked the constant use ...