Eimear

Hey, Snoink's pretty much outlined what you can do to help this poem along. As regards to your poetry, well there's plenty of things that can help you progress. I ...

Wow, a lot of emotion in this poem. A heck of a lot of dare I say, bitterness as well. In any case, I guess I believed the speaker had ...

First tip- try not to explain your poetry. A famous poet once said 'Good poetry will explain itself' So now onto the poem. It's great that you've chosen something that ...

Aww this is awesome, nice job! I feel like such a horrible, narrow-minded person trying to nit-pick this, but it's only because I do it out of 'True Love' for ...

I'm straining to read this as poetry as well. Although I liked the theme- certainly no emo or overly tragic language used here. Yay! I find it hard to believe ...

"How lovely to see ya again!" Misty shrieks as she and JK rush upstairs. "I love your top! You have new lip gloss? Love it." This is all a little ...

This is good in theory, but there were a few problems with it that just prevented me from enjoying it very much. You tell,tell,tell the story instead of showing us ...

I liked this as well. I was oddly enjoyable to read. However, a word of caution. It;s obvious from this piece that you can indeed use poetic devices and words ...

Ringo_rules has pointed out most of the main typos and grammatical errors with the piece so I won't chase you up on that. Other than the confusion, I think there's ...

Hey, haven't seen you around before. I'm Eimear, pleased to meet you! Ok, onto the poem. The first thing that struck me was that it seemed more like prose than ...

Sorry- I'll probably come back and make this a much longer review later, just while I was reading this there I noticed one line that I would change: I’m walking ...

I've been very bad lately in not reviewing- well, it's actually because I'm in the middle of exams so technically I'm being good....oh, stop jabbering Eimear. Ok, so- what I'm ...

Heya, I haven't see you around. I'm Eimear, by the way. Nice to meet you! So I thought this was pretty awesome. A few things bugged me though. Well, not ...

Wow, I really loved this. I can't even really see much wrong with it either (sorry if I'm rather useless in this critique) but I had to leave a comment. ...

I agree with all of Mad's comments. I reads like a boring history list from a textbook. The poem lacks emotion, poetic devices and a sound rhythm or structure. I ...