Ego

Empress Kat narrowed her eyebrows and crinkled her nose. Her lips turned down in a frown and her cheeks puffed out a little, as a toddler’s does when they don’t ...

Oops! I broke the car!

This is the modified introduction to the King Max story, which will then lead into the Halloween one.

Anytime, pal--always a pleasure to read your stuff! I really should finish Shadow...I'll get to it eventually, I promise! If you want me to crit anything else, hit me up ...

*thumbs up* Absolutely--if you have any more stuff you want me to critique, send me a PM; your work is a pleasure to read and edit. --Dono

“We should go back now. Master Percevil wants a few of the old manuscripts rewritten.” He stuffed his hand into his pockets and made the long journey back home. The ...

The last sentence didn't sound gay, just awkward. You really could leave off "in a hug," because it means the same thing as embraced, so it's repetetive. Lookin' good so ...

Haha, I just re-read this, and even I'm amused at the stupidity of it all--funny how it sounds as if Kat and I were going out, even way back then ...

Smaur...dear...you're scaring me greatly.

The source of his excitement walked on, oblivious. Shifting silently, he began to stalk the child. Hmm…it sounds odd to me to mention an object of excitement without first letting ...

I'm mentioned! I'm mentioned!

So.. "This is really good except for it's too short and you need to write lots lots more to imporve on the hilarity because right now you totall made me ...

The P-90 is not an assault rifle, it is a submachine gun... Rather amusing, my friend.

Ah! She posted more! The addition is very nice, Samita--I didn't see anything that yelled at me, so I don't really have anything to say at this point. I shall ...

Lol, I don't know, actually; can you expand on that, please? It was pretty vague...